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[flemmings]

Because I feel ijiwaru I shall post the translation to the spring Gaiden episode that hasn't yet appeared online. Well, not on many people's line, whatever.

The karma may be that Enrai is the spitting image of Yakumo, but that's not what I mean.

p.1 Lamentation for the one still buried, even now, amid that pale crimson

p.2 The road to despair up ahead

p.3 F/X hurtling bodies
mad dash
The four rebels who have crept into the imperial palace

p.4 are headed towards the deepest level of the castle basements, making for the dimension gate that leads to the lower world
Soldier: Don't let them get away! Kill them if you must!
On the way they break through a guarded passage on the first floor of the northern wing
Konzen: (surprise)
Gokuu: Here they come!
Soldier: (grunt)
F/X Gokuu trips the soldier

p5 Soldier: Damn kid-- guhhh!
F/X Konzen's heeled sandal digs into soldier
Kenren: It's the door at the end of the corridor, Konzen!
F/X door pushed open
Konzen: Gokuu! Hurry!
Gokuu: (grunts as he kicks)
F/X soldier goes flying

p.6 F/X thud of running feet
Soldier: WAIT!!
F/X soldier's gurgle as Tenpou jabs him with his sheathed sword
Kenren: Get in here, Tenpou!!
F/X Kenren kicks door shut

p.7 F/X Tenpou and Gokuu panting
Konzen: gasping for breath
Kenren: You OK, Konzen?
Konzen: Yeah...
Kenren: Looks like they're not going to give us a rest.
Konzen: What?
F/X squadron on upper level with bows drawn aiming at the guys

p.8 (round chamber ringed with archers)

p.9 (hollow noise)
Konzen: What...?
Konzen: (thinks) We're surrounded?!
Tenpou: Should have known- you're a bright boy-
Second Squadron leader of the Western army

p.10 Tenpou: Enrai.
Enrai: I'm honoured by your good opinion of me, Marshal Tenpou
Tenpou: Right now I'm just a nameless fugitive. Oh, and I've resigned as marshal
Kenren: Enrai- he was leader of the first squadron before I was
He and Tenpou didn't get along so he was moved to another division.
Enrai: So you're resigned to your fate?
Tenpou: Not yet! Or rather, how about just overlooking our existence?
Enrai: ...you always did take your jokes too far

P11 Enrai: I always figured someone like you didn't know how the men who followed you felt.
Tenpou: Nothing of the sort. I just get on best with people who like joking too.
Enrai: And because you're that kind of officer, you were content to have a mere fourteen men attached to you.
Kenren: I don't care what you say about us two. But I won't keep my mouth shut while you make fun of my squadron

p.12 Enrai: Really? So what are you going to do?
You have a nerve, acting big when things are like this.
Tenpou: Don't stop- just keep running through them.
Konzen: What?
Enrai: I'm going to give you what you deserve
You filthy--

p.13 Enrai: RATS!! (J note: well, hedgehogs, actually, but really...)
Tenpou: RUN!!!
F/X flat out running
Enrai: Shoot them!!!
F/x bows drawn back
Voices: Guahh! Guh!
F/X blows

p.14 Enrai soldier: Gah---!!
(Enrai's men fall with arrows in them)
(Kenren's men fighting)
Kenren: !!?
F/X one of Enrai's men falls from the parapet
Kenren: You guys--?

P15 F/X sound of hand-to-hand fight
Kenren soldier: Are you alright, General?! Marshal?
Tenpou: What are you doing here??
F/X wounded soldier groans

P.16 Enrai: So the mice have come out--
F/X Enrai soldier grunts as Kenren soldier kicks him
Kenren soldier 1: We'll take over here
Kenren soldier 2: Go on ahead while you can, General!
Kenren: *Cut it out!!* You guys can't get involved in this!!
Tenpou: We're not your commanding officers any more!!
Soldier: --sorry! Can't hear what you're saying, marshal!

P.17 Soldier: 'In the absence of orders take personal responsibility'- that's our squadron's motto, right?
Soldier: That barbecue was really good, General!
Kenren: sheesh- these assholes!
(flashback) Kenren to Tenpou: Everyone wants to fight *with* you!
Konzen: Tenpou!!

P.18 F/X Enrai's swordstroke
Enrai: (yells) Ooohh--!!!
F/X Tenpou's sword sheath falls to the ground

P19 F/X Enrai spits blood
F/X blood spurt
F/X Tenpou's sword stroke?

p.20 Tenpou: --this is my final order
Kill them all!
Don't leave a single man alive who saw you here. Do you hear me!!

p.21 Soldiers: YES SIR!!!
F/X Tenpou and Kenren start running again
Tenpou: Good. We're out of here.
F/X Enrai soldiers guarding the door prepare for attack
Kenren soldier: But in that case--
The General and the Marshal will get all the glory of having killed this lot!
Enrai soldier: Don't let them get away! Kill them!
Kenren: (laughs) Don't be such a party-pooper.

P22
F/X Kenren's gun firing
F/X Tenpou runs soldier through
Soldier: Gahhh---
Gokuu: Ten-chan--
Ken nii-san, hurry!

p.23 F/X Kenren's boot step
Soldier: Take care, Marshal, General!
Soldier: Let's have some more barbecue!
Kenren: Got it, got it!
Next time it'll be the first class special
F/X doors slam
Enrai soldier: (frustration)
Kenren soldier: Eizen! Goyou!
F/X Enrai soldier punches Tenpou soldier

p.24 Kenren soldier: We're gonna carry out this mission no matter what. This is the Western army, first squadron's final battle.
Tenpou: Well then, let's be on our way.
The longer it takes the more people we'll have after us.
Kenren: Tenpou

p.25 Kenren: Next time we split the cost.
Tenpou: But naturally.
Tenpou (to Gokuu): Are you afraid of me?
F/X Gokuu shakes his head

p.26 Gokuu: I figured, whatever happens I'll always like you, Ken-nii and Ten-chan.
The way those guys back there did.

Comments

[ayonoi.livejournal.com]

Just wow! Thank you so much for the translation. I am so familiar with Minekura's sense of action that I could picture it in my head (of course, my imagination can't make up for her beautiful art). I was quite moved how Tenpou and Kenren's soldiers had not doubt where they threw their lots. That loyalty, those kids are going to die but at least they are doing it for something and someone they respect and believe in. I personally it was awesome how commanding Tenpou was when he gave his final orders and then the banter between him and Kenren.

I was a little puzzled as of why he asked Goku if he was scared of him but it makes sense, Goku has never seen Tenpou as the Marshal, only as Ten-niichan. His response is not surprising XD (that little Monkey is too cute for me to resist, he makes me cry and smile. I have to say that when I see anything with Anpan man on it, I smile!).

Much love to you.

[flemmings.livejournal.com]

Tenpou's also blood-stained from running a man through. Yes, a bit scary, also in view of what Gokuu doesn't quite remember doing himself.

[mikeneko.livejournal.com]

Cool. (cough) I'd sneakily swiped it from chaosd, but I haven't looked at it yet. ^^;

. . .

ANYWAY, while I'm in the vicinity, this has to do with that other thing the other day, regarding Hakkai the Secretly Simmering Pot of Psychosis. It (belatedly) prodded to mind a humor fanfic called "The Monkey (http://web.archive.org/web/20030831110137/http://fix.dejabu.org/monkey.html)" (durendal and The Beef Chick):

Gojyo: Shut up! Oi, Sanzou, er, Sanzou-sama (and I'm not making fun of you this time!), I had nothing to do with this. It was all Hakkai's idea. He wanted something to kill.

Hakkai: I'll kill you! I mean, maa.

[flemmings.livejournal.com]

The stuffed monkey rings bells. I don't think I ever got the final version though. Thanks.

[delurk]

[umadoshi.livejournal.com]

I've been dropping by your journal for a while (found you via oyceter ^^), and this post reminded me that I've been meaning to say hi and ask if I can Friend you.

The translation is lovely! And someone on a community I'm in provided this link to scans of the chapter (http://www.melbournego.com/Gaiden/Ward__12/chinese/01.htm) (not actually in Japanese), for people who need it.

Re: [delurk]

[flemmings.livejournal.com]

No need to ask about friending- it's a free internet. Welcome aboard.

Yes, I was going form KaKa's scans too, fortunately before she did the Chinese scanlation to them. I think the Japanese version may still be somewhere on her site; but in any case Kagenami should be home soon from vacation and we can look forward to the radiofreebanri version with commentary.

Re: [delurk]

[umadoshi.livejournal.com]

Thank you! I'm just getting into Saiyuki, and the fandom looks lovely, but I tend to be slow to actually say hello to anyone. ^^

Ahh--if it's someone you know, I should ask--I looked around the site when I got the link, but didn't see any English terms of service. Does the person who does the scans mind if the link is passed around? (Which seems silly to ask after the fact, but if they object I'll be less casual about it. My primary fandom is touchy about that kind of thing. :/)

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[fuzzy-carpet.livejournal.com]

My sincerest appreciation to you for sharing the link. ^_^

Wow...just, wow. I am in continual awe of the way Minekura-sensei drew Tenpou's and Kenren's faces here...and the shot of Tenpou's lanky hair spilling over the back of his shoulders, it's as if I could almost reach out and touch it (but I'd probably want to wash it for him first. *grin*)

[doire]

Thank you for this. The artwork is (I assume when I get to see it will be) stunning. but the words are important.

It's a little like watching a crash unfold; I know what's gong to happen, but I need to watch for glimmers of hope.

You'd think a long time Doctor Who fan would have a better grasp of twisted tenses.

Can I just ask? Is this (flashback) Kenren to Tenpou: Everyone wants to fight *with* you! ambiguous in the original in the same way as the English can be, or is a very different construction?

[flemmings.livejournal.com]

(Gahh- repost)

Not ambiguous at all. I suppose it should be something like 'along with you' or 'by your side' to avoid that interpretation. The original ep, now in Gaiden 2, has Tenpou telling his men to stay back while he takes on a bunch of large and dangerous youkai beasts alone, nearly getting himself killed, having Kenren disobey orders to come save his neck, and the other men yelling 'Marshal are you alright!' 'Marshal, we're with you!' Kenren points out, understandably testy, that they're *Tenpou's* men and they want to work alongside him as any soldiers would. Tenpou has had a subordinate die on him in the past and, the implication is, doesn't want to repreat the experience.

(I should note, because I'm a grammar geek, that Japanese has a good and much used construction to express 'have someone die on you' with connotations of all the trouble that caused you. Tenpou doesn't use it. He uses the causative which means both make and let: I let one of my men die, I made one of my men die, with connotations of personal responsibility.)

[flemmings.livejournal.com]

Yes, well, this I think is why Gonou did what Gonou did. I know karma theoretically works the other way- order a murder in one life, get yourself murdered in another- but the element of repeating the same mistake to greater and greater personal cost has its appeal.

[incandescens]

Thank you very much.

(Full knowledge, full consent. Yup.)

[flemmings.livejournal.com]

(grim) Crommie's definition of a mortal sin. However much one may argue the morality of how wrong is it to order your men to kill the men who clearly have orders to kill you.

[oprettylights.livejournal.com]

Hello! *found you through F-List*
Kyu... May I Friends you?

[flemmings.livejournal.com]

By all means. (Don't most people's friends come from friends' friends' lists? Mine do. ^_^)

[candy-bosatsu.livejournal.com]

Hi!

Thank you sosososososososo much for the wonderful translation! That was awesome! *me friends you xD*

And weeeeeh, Kaka´s site is the best! I loved the 2nd picture of this season´s volume... *-* Look at the way Konzen is holding Goku! So sweet! (and tragic, in a way ._.)

[fuzzy-carpet.livejournal.com]

Adding my voice once again to the chorus of "thank-yous", mjj. Bless your heart. ^_^

Maybe it's just me, but this episode has me both cheering our foursome onwards and gnawing my knuckles in dread. Things have gone fairly well for their "escape" so far (even for Goku) that I just know deep down in my guts that somebody is waiting patiently at the dimensional gate/portal for their arrival. I'm not the betting kind, since I always lose...but my money's on Nataku. (And I don't think he'll be holding a fruit basket.)

[flemmings.livejournal.com]

Well, if Minekura even remembers back as far as the first volume of Saiyuuki, someone's supposed to *do* Konzen bloodily. I can't quite see why it'd be Nataku, though, who seemed happier slitting himself open than harming Gokuu.

[flemmings.livejournal.com]

Yes, please do. Since I seem to have unwittingly sporked the RFB version (snerf) it's the least I can do. Shall provide gankable scans if and when my copy arrives.

[flemmings.livejournal.com]

Oh, and while I have you here- there's an article in today's NYT about complex regional pain syndrome, which is defined as "a nerve disorder formerly known as reflex sympathetic dystrophy syndrome. For patients with the disorder, a trauma as mild as a fractured wrist or a twisted ankle can cause the nerves to misfire, so much so that intense pain messages are constantly sent to the brain."

The article's here (http://www.nytimes.com/2006/05/30/health/30pain.html) but it may requires logging in or bug me not-ing to read. Not sure if this has been considered in your case or not, so I just mention.

[louiselux.livejournal.com]

Thank you for this!

P.17 Soldier: 'In the absence of orders take personal responsibility'- that's our squadron's motto, right?

And then Tenpou does, when he orders his men to kill the others. It seems like he ordered them to do that so they wouldn't get into trouble later. But still, it's quite shocking to hear him say that, and I wonder if that's part of the reason why he asks Goku is he's scared of him now? I mean, as well as slicing Enrai up in front of him.

making for the dimension gate that leads to the lower world

Ohh, I did wonder how it worked, getting to and from heaven.

Also, hedgehogs??

[flemmings.livejournal.com]

I believe the previous ep had Goujun mentioning the gate 'that the western army uses when it goes Down Below' (And why only the western army, I wondered. The only army that concerns itself with matters down here? And what do the other armies do?)

Harinezumi, needle rat. 'Body resembles a rat but the back is covered with needle-like quills. Rolls itself into a ball when attacked. Found in various locations throughout Asia and Europe' says the J-J without commenting on any anthropomorphic associations it might have, the way badgers do. Sounds like a hedgehog to me, without the Mrs. Tiggy-winkle associations. (Googling to find out what that name was exactly reveals that most people associate hedgehogs with Sonic the. Sic transit.)

Maybe, rats with weapons = hedgehogs?

[mistressrenet.livejournal.com]

Amazing. Just amazing. Thanks for the translation.